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the proportion of the world population in six different regions in two separate years.

the proportion of the world population in six different regions in two separate years. PEJdE
The given pie charts compare the proportion of the world population in six different regions in two separate years. The general overview here is that the Asia was the region that there were a majority of population in the world in both given years. As it can be seen from the charts, Most of the world population were live in the Asia region in 1990. Accounting for 60% of the total percentage. There were a slight decrease of 6% to 54% in 2000, Which this amount including the former Soviet Asia. Similarly, the number of population in the Latin America declined a mere 5% from exactly 8% to 3% in after a decade. Moreover, the number of the Europe’s population dropped significant by 11% to 14% in 2000. In contrast, the number of population in The Africa and Latin America rose minimally by 6% and 5% to 10% and 8% respectively throughout the period. It was interesting to note that there were a number of 6% of population in the Middle East and North Africa, which was the brand new region in 2000 and there were a period of stability at 5% and 3% in the number of population in The North America and the other regions consecutively over the period observed and
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in two separate years. The general overview here is that the Asia was the
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that there were a majority of
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from the charts, Most of the world
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in the Asia
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in 1990. Accounting for 60% of the total percentage. There were a slight decrease of 6% to 54% in 2000, Which this amount including the former Soviet Asia.
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in the Latin America declined a mere 5% from exactly 8% to 3% in after a decade.
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of the Europe’s
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dropped significant by 11% to 14% in 2000.

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in The Africa and Latin America rose
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throughout the period. It was interesting to note that there were a
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in the Middle East and North Africa, which was the
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in 2000 and there were a period of stability at 5% and 3% in the
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