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The line graph illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 in the USA, Sweden, and Japan over a period of 100 years.

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 in the USA, Sweden, and Japan over a period of 100 years. Overall, it is clear that the proportion of elderly people upward trend in each country between 1940 and 2040. Japan is expected to see the most dramatic changes in the elderly population. In 1940, around 9% of Americans were aged 65 or over, compared to about 7% of Sweden people and 5% of Japanese people. The percentage of elderly people in the USA and Sweden increased gradually over the next 50 years, reaching just under 15% in 2000. However, the proportion of elderly people in Japan remained to under 5% until early 2000. Looking into the future, a sudden increase in the percentage of elderly people is predicted for Japan, with a growth of over 15% in just 10 years from 2030 to 2040, it could reach 27% of the population will be 65 years old or more in 2040, while the figure for the USA and Sweden are predicted for a slight decrease, at about 23% and 25% respectively.
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aged 65 in the USA, Sweden, and
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Japan
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a period of 100 years.

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that the proportion of
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upward trend in each country between 1940 and 2040.
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Japan
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the most dramatic
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changes
in the
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population.

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, compared to about 7% of Sweden
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and 5% of Japanese
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people
. The percentage of
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elderly
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people
in the USA and Sweden increased
gradually
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the
next
50 years, reaching
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under 15% in 2000.
However
, the proportion of
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elderly
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people
in
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Japan
remained to under 5% until early 2000.

Looking into the future, a sudden increase in the percentage of
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elderly
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people
is predicted
for
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Japan
, with a growth of
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15% in
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10 years from 2030 to 2040, it could reach 27% of the population will be 65 years
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or more in 2040, while the figure for the USA and Sweden
are predicted
for a slight decrease, at about 23% and 25%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 in the USA, Sweden, and Japan over a period of 100 years.

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