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The line graph illustrates the number of male and female gym membership from 1980 and 2010

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The line graph illustrates the number of male and female gym membership from 1980 and 2010. Overall, the trends of gym membership in both genders fluctuated over the period. In addition, the figure for men was higher than women in most of the time, apart from the 1990s and 2010s. In 1980, starting at over 2000, there was a significant increase in the number of men joining gym membership, reaching a peak of 4000 in 1985 before facing a sharp decline to around 1800 in 1995. After that, a substantial rise was witnessed in the figure of male gym membership, peaking at 5000 in 2005, but then fell dramatically to about 700 in 2010. On the other hand, in 1980, the number of female gym membership was 1000, and later grew gradually despite some fluctuation and climbed to a peak of nearly 3000 in the next 15 years. From 1995 to 2010, the figure of women underwent a volatile trend, ranging from over 2000 to roughly 3000 before dropping to under 2000 in 2010
The line graph illustrates the number of male and female
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from 1980 and 2010
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Overall
, the trends of
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gym
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in both genders fluctuated over the period.
In addition
, the figure for
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men
was higher than women in most of the time, apart from the 1990s and 2010s.

In 1980, starting at over 2000, there was a significant increase in the number of
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men
joining
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gym
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membership
, reaching a peak of 4000 in 1985
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before
facing a sharp decline to around 1800 in 1995. After that, a substantial rise
was witnessed
in the figure of male
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gym
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, peaking at 5000 in 2005,
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but
then fell
dramatically
to about 700 in 2010.

On the other hand
, in 1980, the number of female
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gym
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membership
was 1000, and later grew
gradually
despite
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some
fluctuation and climbed to a peak of
nearly
3000 in the
next
15 years. From 1995 to 2010, the figure of women underwent a volatile trend, ranging from over 2000 to roughly 3000
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before
dropping to under 2000 in 2010
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