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The graph below show the percentage of personnel having different educational qualification in education set up.

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The assigned bar graph illustrates the information regarding the proportion of men and women having various qualification in and education set up. Overall, it is quite evident that the maximum percentage of females in under matriculates as well as matriculates with the exception of males in same qualification. Turning to details, the percentage of males with doctorates stood at approximately 42% as against 62% females. Interestingly, the proportion of men and women is depicts resemblance of almost 55%. The most surprising figure in the graph is graduates there is only 40% females who are graduate Moving to matriculates, the proportion of men not as much in matriculates as women the figure for former is 20% and latter is 90%. However, the percentage of females who are under matriculates is 90% and 10% males who are under matriculates.
The assigned bar graph illustrates the information regarding the proportion of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women having various qualification in and education set up.
Overall
, it is quite evident that the maximum percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
in under matriculates
as well
as matriculates
Consider using "except" or "except for"
with the exception of
males in same qualification. Turning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
, the percentage of males with doctorates stood at approximately 42% as against 62%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
.
Interestingly
, the proportion of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women is depicts resemblance of almost 55%. The most surprising figure in the graph is graduates there is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
40%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
who are graduate Moving to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "matriculate".
matriculates
, the proportion of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
not as much in matriculates as women the figure for former is 20% and latter is 90%.
However
, the percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
who are under matriculates is 90% and 10% males who are under matriculates.
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IELTS academic The graph below show the percentage of personnel having different educational qualification in education set up.

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