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The graphs below show the number of participants in the Olympics since it began.

The graphs below show the number of participants in the Olympics since it began. X7jMq
The bar and line graph show the number of people take part in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012. While the bar chart compares the number of participants between female and male, the line graph illustrates the total number of participants in the same period. Overall, there was an upward trend of the number of people participated in the Olympics over the period of 88 years in both graph. The participants who were men is more than women in bar chart, whereas the line saw an steady increase in the number of participants in both gender. The bar chart shows that in the Olympics, the number of men join in take over the number of women, at 3000 people at the beginning. In contrast, the number of women competitors at that time were just below 100 people, but then rise dramatically to just under 5000 at the end of the period. The number of male participants still higher than female in 2012, by nearly 1200 people. The line graph saw an steady climb of the number of participants from around 2500 to just over 7000 people between 1924 and 1984, then this number reached a peak at over 1000 people in 2012.
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in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012. While the bar chart compares the
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of
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participants
between female and male, the
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graph
illustrates the total
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of
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participants
in the same period.

Overall
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participated in the Olympics
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the period of 88 years in both
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. The
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who were
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is more than women in bar chart, whereas the
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an
steady increase in the
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participants
in both gender.

The bar chart
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that in the Olympics, the
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in take
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of women, at 3000
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at the beginning.
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of women competitors at that time were
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below 100
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under 5000 at the
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of the period. The
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higher than female in 2012, by
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steady climb of the
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from around 2500 to
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7000
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between 1924 and 1984, then this
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