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The line graph illustrates the average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services from 2001 to 2010.

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The line graph illustrates the average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services from 2001 to 2010. Overall, the data collected from U. S. Bureau of Labour Statistics shows that expenditures on cell phone services increased rapidly while expenditures for residential phone services experienced a downward trend. In 2001, consumers, on average, spent $200 on cell phone services. Sales from mobile phone services experienced a rapid surge throughout the time period as services began to grow popular. For the first two years, customers’ annual spending rose gradually. Between 2003 to 2007, the expenditure climbed steeply by approximately $300. Spending on cell phone services surpassed spending on residential phone services in 2006, with customers spending $550 annually on mobile phone services. The next three years saw the expenditure continue to rise and lastly, in 2010, the average annual consumer expenditure stood at an impressive $750. Taking a look at expenditure on residential phone services, the yearly consumer spending was slightly below $700 in 2001. Spending on these services declined in the following years. In 2006, when mobile phone services overtook residential ones, the average customer spending on residential phone services decreased below $500 and experienced a steep fall in 2007. In the following years, expenditure continued to decline and stood at approximately $400 at the end of the period
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from 2001 to 2010.

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increased
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experienced a downward trend.

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, spent $200 on
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. Sales from mobile
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experienced a rapid surge throughout the time period as
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began to grow popular. For the
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in 2006, with customers
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stood at an impressive $750.

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, the yearly consumer
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was
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declined in the following years. In 2006, when mobile
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overtook
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decreased below $500 and experienced a steep fall in 2007. In the following years,
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continued to decline and stood at approximately $400 at the
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services from 2001 to 2010.

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