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The bar below shows the percentage of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables every day in UK.

The bar below shows the percentage of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables every day in UK. QamK
The bar graph gives information about the percentage of men, women and children who consumed 5 portions of fruits and vegetables from 2001 to 2008. It can be noted that in all the years, women were highest consumers followed by Men and then Children. The percentage of Women, who ate fruits and vegetables increased steadily from 2001 to 2006 followed by a slight decrease over the next two years. While percentages did not change for the first three years for Men and Children, a significant increase can be seen from 2004 until 2006 for Men and 2007 for Children. In 2007, the percentage remained same as the previous year for Men. This dropped slightly during the next year. Women reached their highest percentage at more than 30% in 2006, and Men reached their highest at more than 25% in the 2006 and 2007. Although Children reached highest percentage for consumption of fruits and vegetables in 2007, this trend too dipped a bit in the following year.
The bar graph gives information about the
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, women and
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who consumed 5 portions of fruits and vegetables from 2001 to 2008. It can
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that in all the years, women were
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highest
consumers followed by
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Men
and then Children.

The
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of Women, who ate fruits and vegetables increased
steadily
from 2001 to 2006 followed by a slight decrease over the
next
two years. While
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did not
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first
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Men
and
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Children
, a significant increase can be
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seen
from 2004 until 2006 for
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Men
and 2007 for
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Children
. In 2007, the
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percentage
remained same as the previous
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year
for
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Men
. This dropped
slightly
during the
next
year.

Women reached their highest
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at more than 30% in 2006, and
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Men
reached their highest at more than 25% in the 2006 and 2007. Although
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Children
reached
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highest
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percentage
for consumption of fruits and vegetables in 2007, this trend too dipped a bit in the following
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year
.
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IELTS academic The bar below shows the percentage of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables every day in UK.

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166 words
6.0
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