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The line graph illustrates the amount of oil consumed in four different regions from 2009 to 2030.

The line graph illustrates the amount of oil consumed in four different regions from 2009 to 2030. BYow5
The line graph illustrates the amount of oil consumed in four different regions from 2009 to 2030. Overall, the oil consumption of USA and Western Europe & Japan decreased significantly while the figure for China and Middle East grew slightly during the period. In 2009, the USA was the biggest oil consumer with about 9 million litres per day, followed by that was Western Europe & Japan with 4 million per day. From 2009 to 2015, the amount of oil consumed in the USA reached a peak at around 10 million, while there was a slight decline of 3 million in Western Europe & Japan. Up to now, the figures for USA and Western Europe & Japan continued to go down and these figures are predicted to decrease considerably to 8 million and 2 million in 2030. In contrast, the oil consumption in China and the Middle East was both 2 millions litres in 2009 and they grew gradually until now. The amount of oil consumed in China is expected to reach a peak of 4 millions litres per day in 2025, which makes it the second biggest oil consumer before it falls slightly to approximately 3. 5 millions per day in 2030.
The line graph illustrates the amount of
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consumed in four
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different
regions from 2009 to 2030.

Overall
, the
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consumption
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of USA
and Western Europe &
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Japan
decreased
significantly
while the figure for China and Middle East grew
slightly
during the period.

In 2009, the USA was the biggest
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oil
consumer with about 9
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million
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litres
per day, followed by that was Western Europe &
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Japan
with 4
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million
per day. From 2009 to 2015, the amount of
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consumed in the USA reached a peak at around 10
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million
, while there was a slight decline of 3
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million
in Western Europe &
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Japan
. Up to
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now
, the figures
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for USA
and Western Europe &
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Japan
continued to go down and these figures
are predicted
to decrease
considerably
to 8
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million
and 2
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million
in 2030.

In contrast
, the
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oil
consumption in China and the Middle East was both 2
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millions
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litres
in
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2009 and
they grew
gradually
until
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now
. The amount of
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consumed in China is
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expected
to reach a peak of 4
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millions
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litres
per day in 2025, which
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makes
it the second biggest
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consumer
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before
it falls
slightly
to approximately 3. 5
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per day in 2030.

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