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A glance at the bar chart provided reveals of the yearly number of rents and sales of movies from a special market from 2002 to 2011. Overall, the past decade has witnessed a dramatically drop in rental figures and a complex change for sales numbers. In the beginning year of 2002, film rentals ranked the highest at a number of 180, 000 but declined beyond 70, 000 in 2011. Sales numbers of VHS also followed a similar trend with its best value at around 80, 000 in 2002 and dropped to zero in 2006. As for other film sales, there was a considerable growing trend of DVD sales starting from 2002, with a sales number less than 50, 000, reaching a peak number over 210, 000 in 2007. At the same year, Blu-ray products were exposed to the market and gained popularity by years, which resulted in a steady decrease in DVD sales between 2007 and 2011.

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 of VHS also
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sales
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sales
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number
 less than 50, 000, reaching a peak You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
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 to the market and gained popularity by years, which resulted in a steady decrease in DVD You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
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