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The line graph illustrates how the rates of crime in Newpost city were changed between 2003 and 2012.

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The line graph illustrates how the rates of crime in Newpost city were changed between 2003 and 2012. As we can see from the graph, burglary had a downward trend while car theft and robbery had a stable trend. In 2003, burglary was the highest, nearly 3500 while on the other hand, the number of car thefts was less than 500. Robbery was the lowest, just out of 500. In 2004, burglary hit the peak, at 3750 then started to significantly drop 4 years later then hit the lowest point at 1100. After that, burglary remains steady until the end of the process. Instead of significantly changing of burglary, car thief number show small change, kept the number at 2800 from 2003 to 2005 then started decrease to 2100 at 2006 and slightly climbed to 2600 in next 4 years and end in 2012 at the same position with 2003 but then, it was the highest number. Unlike two other numbers, robbery stayed stable through 9 years of research, starting with 600 in 2003 and 600 in 2012.
The line graph illustrates how the rates of crime in
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between 2003 and 2012.

As we can
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from the graph,
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burglary
had a downward trend while car theft and robbery had a stable trend.

In 2003,
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burglary
was the highest,
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3500 while
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of car thefts was less than 500. Robbery was the lowest,
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out of 500. In 2004,
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burglary
hit the peak, at 3750 then
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started
to
significantly
drop 4 years
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hit the lowest point at 1100. After that,
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burglary
remains steady until the
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of the process.

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of
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changing of
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burglary
, car thief
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number
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small
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change
,
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at 2800 from 2003 to 2005 then
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decrease to 2100 at 2006 and
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climbed to 2600 in
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in 2012 at the same position with 2003
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then, it was the highest
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number
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, robbery stayed stable through 9 years of research, starting with 600 in 2003 and 600 in 2012.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates how the rates of crime in Newpost city were changed between 2003 and 2012.

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