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The line-graph illustrates how many people who come to see a doctor per day of the week.

The line-graph illustrates how many people who come to see a doctor per day of the week. Ed3AR
The line-graph illustrates how many people who come to see a doctor per day of the week. Also, the pic-chart represents the levels of patient satisfaction. Overall, It can be seen that most of patients come to meet the doctor on Monday. Moreover, the patient actually feels not satisfied. To begin with, Monday patients visit the doctor around 1, 500 people and then decreased to around 1, 000 people on Tuesday. After that continued dropped to less than 1, 000 people on Wednesday. The figure rose again to 1, 000 people on Thursday. In Friday the number of patients was dropped to just 200 people. Which was the lowest number of whole week. Looking first at, the large number of patients feels satisfied with half of the people. Followed by very satisfied and just a few patients not satisfied when they come to meet the doctors.
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see
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doctor
per day of the week.
Also
, the pic-chart represents the levels of
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patient
satisfaction.
Overall
, It can be
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seen
that most of
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patients
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come
to
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meet
the
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doctor
on Monday.
Moreover
, the
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patient
actually feels not satisfied.

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begin
with, Monday
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patients
visit the
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around 1, 500
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people
and then decreased to around 1, 000
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people
on Tuesday. After that continued dropped to less than 1, 000
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people
on Wednesday. The figure rose again to 1, 000
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people
on Thursday. In Friday the number of
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patients
was dropped
to
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200
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people
.
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was the lowest number of whole week.

Looking
first
at, the large number of
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patients
feels satisfied with half of the
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people
. Followed by
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very
satisfied and
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just
a few
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patients
not satisfied when they
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IELTS academic The line-graph illustrates how many people who come to see a doctor per day of the week.

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146 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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