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The bar chart provides data about employment rates among six selected countries by two genders between 1995 and 2005.

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The bar chart provides data about employment rates among six selected countries by two genders between 1995 and 2005. As is presented, the employment rate of men was higher than females and the overall employment conditions in Iceland were better than other nations. According to the diagram given, in 1995, the employment rate of males in all six countries was above 55% while the female rate reached only less than 50%, except in Switzerland. After a decade, The percentage of male employment rose to 70% and Iceland had the highest data at about 82%. However, the female employee rate has not changed significantly compared to 1995 when the proportion was almost 70% in Switzerland and the rest of the countries it was just around 50%. In summary, male had more employment opportunities than female in six countries which are Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand and the US. Nonetheless,
The bar chart provides data about
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among six selected
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by two genders between 1995 and 2005. As
is presented
, the
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employment
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rate
of
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men
was higher than
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females
and the
overall
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employment
conditions in Iceland were better than other nations.

According to the diagram
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given
, in 1995, the
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employment
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rate
of males in all six
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countries
was above 55% while the
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female
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rate
reached
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only
less than 50%, except in Switzerland. After a decade, The percentage of male
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employment
rose to 70% and Iceland had the highest data at about 82%.
However
, the
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female
employee
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rate
has not
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changed
significantly
compared to 1995 when the proportion was almost 70% in Switzerland and the rest of the
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countries
it was
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just
around 50%.

In summary, male had more
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opportunities than
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female
in six
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countries
which are Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand and the US. Nonetheless,
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IELTS academic The bar chart provides data about employment rates among six selected countries by two genders between 1995 and 2005.

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