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The line graph illustrates how four different companies trained their staff from 2003 to 2006.

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The line graph illustrates how four different companies trained their staff from 2003 to 2006. Overall, despite some fluctuations, there was an increase in the proportion of employees in all 4 companies examined, with company D witnessing the most dramatic rise in the last 2 years. About 25% staff was trained by company C in 2003, with mild fluctuations in the first 2 years and a final rise from just over 31% in 2005 to around 37% in 2006. Similarly, the figure for company B fluctuated in the range from 28 to 31% from 2003 to 2005, followed by a progressive growth to north of 34% in the final year. The training on staff in company A started about 27%, after which it saw a fluctuation to approximately 28% in 2006. The figure for company D saw a similar change in the first year of the period, decreasing from 20% in 2003 to 17% in 2004. From 2004 onwards, it increased considerably, reaching almost 35% in the final year of the period.
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fluctuations, there was an increase in the proportion of employees in all 4
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D witnessing the most dramatic rise in the last 2 years.

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C in 2003, with mild fluctuations in the
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over 31% in 2005 to around 37% in 2006.
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B fluctuated in the range from 28 to 31% from 2003 to 2005, followed by a progressive growth to north of 34% in the final year.

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