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The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. KwWo3
The given line graph illustretes information regarding to number of educatees form Iran, Greek and Turky which enrolled at Sheffield University over a 4 years period form 2005 to 2009. Overall, it is apparent that there was a remarkable increase in the enrollment of Iranian and Turkish students whereas the same declined for Greek pupils during the given time period. To begin, around 40 students were enrolled from Iran in 2005. Then, the enrollment rate increased steadily until 2007 with 70 students. After that, there was a sharp rise noted with 160 pupils in the last year. From Turkey, it started with just 20 educatees which enrolled im 2005, it surpassed Germany and Iranian until 2007 with enrolled 90 students. Then, in swelled up constantly and settled with 120 pupils in 2009. In contrast, enrollment of Greece pupils declined dramatically from 180 in 2005 to only 70 in 2007 (same as Iranians). This number was then remained the same in the subsequent year 2008 and went down to just 42 students in 2009.
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which enrolled at Sheffield University over a 4 years period form 2005 to 2009.

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students
whereas the same declined for Greek
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pupils
during the
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, around 40
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students
were enrolled
from Iran in 2005. Then, the enrollment rate increased
steadily
until 2007 with 70
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students
. After that, there was a sharp rise noted with 160
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pupils
in the last year. From Turkey, it
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with
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20
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which enrolled
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2005, it surpassed Germany and Iranian until 2007 with enrolled 90
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students
. Then, in swelled up
constantly
and settled with 120
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pupils
in 2009.

In contrast
, enrollment of Greece
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pupils
declined
dramatically
from 180 in 2005 to
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only
70 in 2007 (same as Iranians). This number was then remained the same in the subsequent year 2008 and went down to
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42
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in 2009.
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