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The Chart illustrates the amount of electricity manufactured and consumed in 2014 in the top ten countries.

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The Chart illustrates the amount of electricity manufactured and consumed in 2014 in the top ten countries. Units are measured in billion kWh. Overall, the expenditure and manufacturing is higher in China than in the United States and the lowest in Korea Rep. In all Countries is the expenditure slightly under the amount of the manufactured Electricity except in Germany. Now, we have a closer look at the top of the list. China and Russia are 2 of the biggest countries of the world but we can see massive differences in the production of electricity. China had a manufacturing of 5, 398 billion kWh Electricity in compare to Russia had only 1, 057 Billion kWh Electricity. The difference in production is extreme, compare to the size of the county. At the end of the chart we have Germany and Korea Rep. if we compare those to with each other we can see that Germany consumed 582. 5 billion kWh and they produced only 526. 6 billion kWh in 2014. On the other hand we have Korea with a slightly less consumption of 449. 5 billion kWh in compare with the production of 485. 1 kWh electicity.
The Chart illustrates the amount of
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manufactured and consumed in 2014 in the top ten countries. Units
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billion
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slightly
under the amount of the manufactured
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Electricity
except in Germany.

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massive differences in the production of
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. China had a manufacturing of 5, 398
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. The difference in production is extreme,
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to the size of the county.

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of the chart we have Germany and Korea Rep. if we
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those to with each other we can
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that Germany consumed 582. 5
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526. 6
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with the production of 485. 1 kWh
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IELTS academic The Chart illustrates the amount of electricity manufactured and consumed in 2014 in the top ten countries.

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