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The line graph gives information about the cases of diarrea in Mashhad in1983 and 1992

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The line graph illustrates the figures which deal with the cases of diarrea in Mashhad over the period from 1983 to 1992It is clear from the graph that in 1983, the number of peoplewho had diarreawas 100 and this figure stayed unchanged till the middle of 1984. Then, the cases of diarrea had a gradual increase before it dipped the lowest point, at just over 70 people in 1988. Afterwards, the number of patients sharply increased to about 400 people, which was 4 times higher comparing with the starting point. In the mid of 1989, there was a slight decrease before it witnessed a rapid decline which was 0 number in 1992. Overall, after the case of diarea had began, there were some fluctuations and it peaked of the highest point before it totally disappered in Mashhad.
The line graph illustrates the figures which deal with the cases of
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diarrea
in Mashhad over the period from 1983 to 1992It is
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from the graph that in 1983, the number of
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peoplewho
had
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diarreawas
100 and this figure stayed unchanged till the middle of 1984. Then, the cases of
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diarrea
had a gradual increase
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before
it dipped the lowest point, at
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just
over 70
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people
in 1988. Afterwards, the number of patients
sharply
increased to about 400
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people
, which was 4 times higher comparing with the starting point. In the mid of 1989, there was a slight decrease
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before
it witnessed a rapid decline which was 0 number in 1992.
Overall
, after the case of
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diarea
had
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began
, there were
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some
fluctuations and it peaked of the highest point
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before
it
totally
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disappered
in Mashhad.
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IELTS academic The line graph gives information about the cases of diarrea in Mashhad in1983 and 1992

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