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The line graph gives information about profit of three huge companies such as Microsoft, Apple and Google between 1985 and 2009.

The line graph gives information about profit of three huge companies such as Microsoft, Apple and Google between 1985 and 2009. LrQ16
The line graph gives information about profit of three huge companies such as Microsoft, Apple and Google between 1985 and 2009. All in all, it is clear that from the line graph income of three companies were increased, but profit of Apple was rose with fluctuation. Moreover, Google created in 2004, we can count its profit from this year. To begin with, income of Apple was slightly gone up from 1985 to 1995, while profit of Microsoft was increasing normally. After 1995 income of the Apple suffered big declining until 1997, on the contrary earnings of Microsoft started to sharply rising also its income reached to the highest point around 60 billion $. If we look at the earnings of Apple was stayed nearly the same level between 10 billion $ and 5 billion $ over the past 6 years. In addition, in 2004 Google company added to this group, we can say that its income boomed quickly till 20 million $. Also profit of the Apple went up to as Google company’s earnings.
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from this year.

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reached to the highest point around 60 billion $. If we look at the earnings of
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, in 2004 Google
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IELTS academic The line graph gives information about profit of three huge companies such as Microsoft, Apple and Google between 1985 and 2009.

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