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The line graph gives information about a number of gym membership in gender

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The line graph gives information about a number of gym membership in gender from 1980 to 2010. The data presented in thousand and can be split into 2 groups, men and women. Overall, it can be seen that the women remain stable to the end of the period. To begin, male had a 2 fold increase, rising from 2100 to 4000 in 1985 and sharply drop to 1800 in 1995. there was a rapid growth and peak to 5000 in 2005, after that the men experience a dramatical fall untill equal the women at 2800 before 2010 and dip to the lowest at under 1000 in the end of the period Moreover, 1985 saw a slight rise in female of 1000 to 2000
The line graph gives information about a number of gym membership in gender from 1980 to 2010. The data presented in
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thousand
and can
be split
into 2 groups,
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men
and women.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the women remain stable to the
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end
of the period.

To
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begin
, male had a 2 fold increase, rising from 2100 to 4000 in 1985 and
sharply
drop to 1800 in 1995.
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there
was a rapid growth and peak to 5000 in 2005, after that the
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men
experience a
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dramatical
fall
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untill
equal the women at 2800
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before
2010 and dip to the lowest at under 1000 in the
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end
of the
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period


Moreover
, 1985
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saw
a slight rise in female of 1000 to 2000
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IELTS academic The line graph gives information about a number of gym membership in gender

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3 paragraphs
122 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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