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The bar graph compares the number of vacation takes who come to the town in the United Kingdom from three different countries and the whole world during the period between 2011 and 2015.

The bar graph compares the number of vacation takes who come to the town in the United Kingdom from three different countries and the whole world during the period between 2011 and 2015. 25ybx
The bar graph compares the number of vacation takes who come to the town in the United Kingdom from three different countries and the whole world during the period between 2011 and 2015. It is clear from the graph that the number of tourists from India had the first rank in terms of travel abroad and an upward trend were recorded for the vistors in the second bar chart through each year. Starting with the first bar chart, the quatity of vacation takers from India in 2011 was 350 and declined mildly in 2012. In term of 2013, the figure for India-vacation takers recovered and then rocketed more than 400 for three years. Then, the vistors from Czech Republic in 2011, , prior to reaching a peak at 450 in 2015. Turning to the second bar chart, the number of vistors from whole who visited to the town, was over 1000. In 2012, there was a negligible drop in the number of foreign nations approximately 1200, previously seeing an upward trend in the next two years. In the last year, it reached a peak when compared to previous years, at around 4500.
The bar graph compares the
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clear
from the graph that the
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of tourists from India had the
first
rank in terms of travel abroad and an upward trend
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for the
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vistors
in the second bar chart through each year.

Starting with the
first
bar chart, the
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quatity
of vacation takers from India in 2011 was 350 and declined
mildly
in 2012. In term of 2013, the figure for India-vacation takers recovered and then rocketed more than 400 for three years. Then, the
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vistors
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in 2011,
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prior to reaching a peak at 450 in 2015.

Turning to the second bar chart, the
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of
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vistors
from whole who visited to the town, was over 1000. In 2012, there was a negligible drop in the
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of foreign nations approximately 1200, previously seeing an upward trend in the
next
two years. In the last
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year
, it reached a peak when compared to previous years, at around 4500.

IELTS academic The bar graph compares the number of vacation takes who come to the town in the United Kingdom from three different countries and the whole world during the period between 2011 and 2015.

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