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The line graph given illustrates how much population of group ages has grown in New Zealand within 100 years, starting from 1950.

The line graph given illustrates how much population of group ages has grown in New Zealand within 100 years, starting from 1950. B7MDw
The line graph given illustrates how much population of group ages has grown in New Zealand within 100 years, starting from 1950. Overall, the proportion of New Zealand population almost fluctuated. While the percentage of population of 0-14, over 65 ages fluctuated gradually, population growth of 25-37, 38-45 ages saw dramatically fluctuation. In 1950, the proportion of 0-14 ages accounted for about 5%. This figure increased to exactly 20% by the end of the period. A similar fluctuant trend was seen in the proportion of over 65 ages, which declined from 60% by about 5% at the period examined. At the beginning of the period, the rate of 25-37 ages registered approximately 21%. This figure declined significantly to exactly 0% in 2050. A similar fluctuation was recorded in the percentage of 38-45 ages, rising from 25% in 1950 to 40% in 2050.
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population
of group
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ages
has grown in New Zealand within 100 years, starting from 1950.

Overall
, the proportion of New Zealand
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almost fluctuated. While the percentage of
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population
of 0-14, over 65
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ages
fluctuated
gradually
,
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growth of 25-37, 38-45
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ages
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In 1950, the proportion of 0-14
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ages
accounted for about 5%. This figure increased to exactly 20% by the
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trend was
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in the proportion of over 65
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ages
, which declined from 60% by about 5% at the period examined.

At the beginning of the period, the rate of 25-37
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ages
registered approximately 21%. This figure declined
significantly
to exactly 0% in 2050. A similar fluctuation
was recorded
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, rising from 25% in 1950 to 40% in 2050.
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IELTS academic The line graph given illustrates how much population of group ages has grown in New Zealand within 100 years, starting from 1950.

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