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The bar chart given illustrates how many young people studied at university in four countries in three different years 2000, 2005 and 2010.

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The bar chart given illustrates how many young people studied at university in four countries in three different years 2000, 2005 and 2010. Overall, while an upward trend was seen in the percentage of university students in countries A and D, the proportion of college students in countries B and C remained almost unchanged. In 2000, the percentage of young people in country A studying at university accounted for about 38%. This figure increased to approximately 58% by 2010. A similar upward trend was seen in the proportion of university students in country D, which rose from 60% to 80% throughout the period examined. At the beginning of the period, the rate of youngsters entering college registered exactly 40%. This figure declined slightly before returning to its original level in 2010. A similar stable trend was recorded in university attendances in country C, rising mildly before remaining unchanged at about 52% until 2010
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accounted for about 38%. This figure increased to approximately 58% by 2010. A similar upward trend was
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D, which rose from 60% to 80% throughout the period examined.

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IELTS academic The bar chart given illustrates how many young people studied at university in four countries in three different years 2000, 2005 and 2010.

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