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The bar chart illustrates the differences between four means of transport that Danish people used to commute on a daily basis during the 1960-2000 period.

The bar chart illustrates the differences between four means of transport that Danish people used to commute on a daily basis during the 1960-2000 period. 6mdJG
The bar chart illustrates the differences between four means of transport that Danish people used to commute on a daily basis during the 1960-2000 period. In general, it is evident from the chart that the percentage of Danish citizens used to travel by car starting a low rate, but observe a constant upward trend. In contrast, the number of people who moved around by bus, bike and foot witness a significant decline According to the diagram, there were just 5% of Danish citizens used to drive a car in 1960 which was the lowest rate of four types of transportation. However, after 40 years, the proportion of car users rocketed to about 40% by the end of the surveyed period. On the other hand, bus experienced a remarkable fluctuation in the percentage of travelers. The percentage went up steeply to about 30% in 1980 and then decreased to 20% in 2000 As for bike and foot, it is evident that people in Denmark tended to lose their interest in riding a bike or walking around as time went by. The popularity of foot traveling plummeted constantly in three different years. After falling slightly, the rate of bike users dove dramatically to 5%. Similarly, the number of people who commuted by foot dropped more than three folds 40 years later.
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in Denmark tended to lose their interest in riding a
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