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The line graph demonstrates how many visitors per month went to three museums which are the British Museum, the Science Museum, and the Natural History Museum in summer 2013.

The line graph demonstrates how many visitors per month went to three museums which are the British Museum, the Science Museum, and the Natural History Museum in summer 2013. b3DV6

The line graph demonstrates how many visitors per month went to three museums which are the British Museum, the Science Museum, and the Natural History Museum in summer 2013. Overall, the number of people who visited the British Museum was always the highest although there were fluctuations in the figures for all the three museums. Looking at the data in the British Museum, at the beginning, it stood at exactly 600 thousand before increasing significantly and reaching a peak of about 750 thousand in July. After that, because of a sharp decrease, this figure fell to the lowest point of 500 thousand in the next month. However, the last year of the given period witnessed a considerable growth of 150 thousand people who went to the British Museum. Regarding the Natural History Museum, the number of visitors who travelled to this destination experienced a noticeable decline of 200 thousand people in the first month. After that, this figure remained unchanged at below 400 thousand before rising to approximately 470 thousand in September. As far as the Science Museum is concerned, the data went down and reached its bottom of 300 thousand. In addition, a moderate increase to 450 thousand in this figure was reported between August and September.

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