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The line graph demonstrates changes in the percentage of domestic access to technology over the period between 1996 and 2003 in the UK.

The line graph demonstrates changes in the percentage of domestic access to technology over the period between 1996 and 2003 in the UK. 75M6b
The line graph gives information about changing trends of personal use CD players, Mobile phone, Home computer and Internet access in the UK households from 1996 to 2003. Overall, in the 1996 the most popular access to modern technology was CD players and it still continued to be the most popular in the 2003 on the contrary people began to use more often Mobile phone. Influence of Mobile phones on access to modern technology has changed from 19 to 70 percent and almost the same situation with the Internet within 7 years. On the one hand, the quantity of users who choose Home computer and CD players were staidly growing and it has increased by 20 percent over the period shown in the graph. On the other hand, although in the 1996 Mobile phones were not popular with 19 percent, already in 1999 they were equal to the number of users and in the 2003 it were between CD player and Home computer.
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, Home computer and Internet access in the UK households from 1996 to 2003.

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from 19 to 70 percent and almost the same situation with the Internet within 7 years.

On the one hand, the quantity of users who choose Home computer and CD
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growing and it has increased by 20 percent over the period shown in the graph.

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were not popular with 19 percent, already in 1999 they were equal to the number of users and in the 2003 it were between CD
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and Home computer.
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