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The chat shows the portion of fruits and vegetables eated per day by UK people from 2001 to 2008

The chat shows the portion of fruits and vegetables eated per day by UK people from 2001 to 2008 EpnnL
The chart illustates the rate of fruits and vegetables eat by British people during each day from 2001 to 2008. It is categorised among three groups such as men, women and children. Overall, the we can clearly understand that, women shown more interest towards having these foods compare to women and children. However, male gender Also was a prominent user. In details, 2006 is the year where both men and women touches their peak point with 35% and 28% respectively. Whereas for children 2007 was the best time (25%). Women contribution was stable for the first- three years from 2001 to 2003, the value remained in 17%, then it shown an upward trend for the next 2 years and reached 30% land mark in 2005. It finished with 29% at the final year. The men and children shown a similar pattern in their progrssion thought the period. Men begin with 17% and it took 5 years for them to reach their peak of 33% in 2006, there Lowest point was in the last year. Finally in terms of children, the values were stayed in 5 % for the starting couple of years. 2006 was the best year for them and worst year was 2008. with 20%
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illustates
the rate of fruits and vegetables eat by British
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people
during each day from 2001 to 2008. It is
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categorised
among three groups such as
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men
,
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women
and
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children
.
Overall
,
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the we
can
clearly
understand that,
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women
shown more interest towards having these foods compare to
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women
and
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children
.
However
, male gender
Also
was a prominent user. In
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details
, 2006 is the
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year where
both
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men
and
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women
touches their peak point with 35% and 28%
respectively
.
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Whereas
for
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children
2007 was the best time (25%).
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Women
contribution was stable for the
first
- three years from 2001 to 2003, the value remained in 17%, then it shown an upward trend for the
next
2 years and reached 30% land mark in 2005. It finished with 29% at the final
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year
. The
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men
and
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children
shown a similar pattern in their
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progrssion
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thought
the period.
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Men
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begin
with 17% and it took 5 years for them to reach their peak of 33% in 2006, there
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point was in the last
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.
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Finally
in terms of
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children
, the values
were stayed
in 5 % for the starting couple of years. 2006 was the best
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year
for them and worst
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year
was 2008.
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with
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IELTS academic The chat shows the portion of fruits and vegetables eated per day by UK people from 2001 to 2008

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205 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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