Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The line graph compares the ratio of inquiries which the Tourist Information Office received from one city over a half-year period in 2011.

The line graph compares the ratio of inquiries which the Tourist Information Office received from one city over a half-year period in 2011. 86RJx
The line graph compares the ratio of inquiries which the Tourist Information Office received from one city over a half-year period in 2011. Overall, it is clear that people who visited to ask were by far the most dominant means of inquiries over the period shown while emails indicate the lowest level at the last months with the data calibrated in hundreds. Initially, the graph for the person had the lowest proportion of inquiries at about just over 4 at the beginning of the period while the Letters and Calls were stable at an almost similar point with approximately 7. 5 and 9, respectively. However, just three months later the former graph that we mentioned overtook the others as the most used way to inquire. Furthermore, between March and May inquiries had received by people experienced substantial growth at just under 1. 6 and continued its upward trend until reached it's all-time high at 1. 9, in June. By contrast, the figure for the calls also increased steeply to 1. 6, but the letters graph saw only a significant fall by 4.
The line
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graph
compares the ratio of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
inquiries
which the Tourist Information Office received from one city over a half-year period in 2011.

Overall
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who visited to ask were by far the most dominant means of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
inquiries
over the period shown while emails indicate the lowest level at the last months with the data calibrated in hundreds.

Initially
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graph
for the person had the lowest proportion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
inquiries
at about
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
over 4 at the beginning of the period while the Letters and Calls were stable at an almost similar point with approximately 7. 5 and 9,
respectively
.
However
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
three months later the former
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graph
that we mentioned overtook the others as the most
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
way to inquire.

Furthermore
, between March and May
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
inquiries
had received by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
experienced substantial growth at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
under 1. 6 and continued its upward trend until reached it's all-time high at 1. 9, in June. By contrast, the figure for the calls
also
increased
steeply
to 1. 6,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the letters
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graph
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a significant fall by 4.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The line graph compares the ratio of inquiries which the Tourist Information Office received from one city over a half-year period in 2011.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts