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alterations to a science park dating back to 2008.

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The given maps illustrate alterations to a science park dating back to 2008. The general overview here is that the park has expanded to include more areas for research, education and improved accessibility. According to the first map, in 2008 the north-west of the park considerable untouched natural land that has now been replaced with research and development centre. Moreover, the reception area were also demolished in favor for University hub, while the adjacent offices remain the same. South of these new facility, the car park was reduced in size, business units are unchanged and most significant, the cyber security building has been enlarged, overtaking previously undeveloped land. In the south section of the park, the circle IT centre has been removed into an innovation centre and there is a new train station on the southernmost tracks with walkways branching off to various facilities. Finally the biking route was erected along an eastern road and running trough the centre of the park past the car park and new building.
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maps illustrate alterations to a science
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park
dating back to 2008. The general overview here is that the
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park
has expanded to include more areas for research, education and
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improved
accessibility.

According to the
first
map, in 2008 the north-west of the
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park
considerable untouched natural land that has
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now
been replaced
with research and development
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centre
.
Moreover
, the reception area were
also
demolished in favor for University hub, while the adjacent offices remain the same. South of these new facility, the car
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park
was
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reduced
in size, business units
are unchanged
and most significant, the cyber security building has
been enlarged
, overtaking previously undeveloped land.

In the south section of the
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park
, the circle IT
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centre
has
been removed
into an innovation
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centre
and there is a new train station on the southernmost
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tracks
with walkways branching off to various facilities.
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Finally
the biking route
was erected
along an eastern road and running trough the
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centre
of the
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park
past the car
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park
and new building.
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IELTS academic alterations to a science park dating back to 2008.

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