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The line graph compares the population size as well as the birth and the mortality rate in England and Wales over the span of three centuries, from 1700 to 2000.

The line graph compares the population size as well as the birth and the mortality rate in England and Wales over the span of three centuries, from 1700 to 2000. EjPM
The line graph compares the population size as well as the birth and the mortality rate in England and Wales over the span of three centuries, from 1700 to 2000. The population is given in millions and the birth and death rates per 1000 people. Overall, the population rate of England and Wales showed an upward trend, whereas, death and birth rate showed a fluctuating trend. The birth rate was constantly higher than the death rate over the period given. As the diagram suggests, the death and birth rate followed a similar trend from 1700-1950. From 1700 to 1750, both rates experienced a significant increase, with the birth rate rose from 30 to 40 birth per 1000 people and mortality rate increased from around 27 to 37 per 1000 people. There was stability in both fractions, before sharp declining from 1800 to 1950, which made up 20 and just above 20 for death rate and birth rate respectively. After that, death rate remained stable. However, birth rate was spiked to almost 34 per 1000 people in 2000. On the other side, the population rate started with the least number at around 2. 5 million. It rocketed in three centuries, which constituted 50 million in 2000 with a stabilized period between 1750 and 1850 at 10 million.
The line graph compares the
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size
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as the
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birth
and the mortality
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rate
in England and Wales over the span of three centuries, from 1700 to 2000. The
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population
is
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given
in
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millions
and the
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birth
and death
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rates
per 1000
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people
.

Overall
, the
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population
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rate
of England and Wales
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showed
an upward trend, whereas, death and
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birth
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rate
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showed
a fluctuating trend. The
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birth
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rate
was
constantly
higher than the death
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rate
over the period
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given
.

As the diagram suggests, the death and
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birth
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rate
followed a similar trend from 1700-1950. From 1700 to 1750, both
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rates
experienced a significant increase, with the
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birth
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rate
rose from 30 to 40
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birth
per 1000
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people
and mortality
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rate
increased from around 27 to 37 per 1000
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people
. There was stability in both fractions,
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before
sharp declining from 1800 to 1950, which made up 20 and
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just
above 20 for death
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rate
and
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birth
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rate
respectively
. After that, death
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remained stable.
However
,
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birth
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rate
was spiked
to almost 34 per 1000
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people
in 2000.

On the other side, the
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population
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started
with the least number at around 2. 5
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million
. It rocketed in three centuries, which constituted 50
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million
in 2000 with a stabilized period between 1750 and 1850 at 10
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million
.

IELTS academic The line graph compares the population size as well as the birth and the mortality rate in England and Wales over the span of three centuries, from 1700 to 2000.

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