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The line graph compares the percentage of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years old in three countries, namely Japan, Sweden, and the US over a century starting from 1940 and projected to 2040.

The line graph compares the percentage of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years old in three countries, namely Japan, Sweden, and the US over a century starting from 1940 and projected to 2040. 7327n
The line graph compares the percentage of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years old in three countries, namely Japan, Sweden, and the US over a century starting from 1940 and projected to 2040. Overall, an upward trend can be observed in all countries and the proportions of older people are predicted to comprise one-fourth of the world population in 2040. It is also noticeable that the old citizen's percentage in Japan will increase significantly afterward. In 1940, around 9% of the American population were aged 65 and over, which was a bit higher than the figures of the two remaining countries. While the proportion of older people in the US and Sweden rose steadily over the next 80 years, reaching merely under 15% and 20%, respectively, the figure for Japan remained below 5% until the early 2000s, after which it climbed to 8% in 2020. Looking forward to the future, a significant increase in the percentage of senior residents is predicted for Japan, with over a quarter of the Japanese population will be 65 years old or over in 2040 while the figure for the US and Sweden show a slight growth to 23% and 25%, respectively.
The line graph compares the percentage of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years
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a century starting from 1940 and projected to 2040.

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, which was a bit higher than the figures of the two remaining countries. While the proportion of older
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remained below 5% until the early 2000s, after which it climbed to 8% in 2020.

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a quarter of the Japanese population will be 65 years
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in 2040 while the figure for the US and Sweden
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