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The line graph compares the numbers of American men and women who died of heart disease between 1979 and 2002

The line graph compares the numbers of American men and women who died of heart disease between 1979 and 2002 AJ711

The line graph compares the numbers of American men and women who died of heart disease between 1979 and 2002. Overall, it can be seen that, unlike men, the number of females who died of heart disease witnessed an upward trend during the period. Focusing on the male victims of cardiovascular diseases, their figure initially stood at around 500, 000. After a leap and reaching a peak at 510, 000 men, this trend fluctuated downward and hit the trough at slightly higher than 430, 000 individuals in 2001. After that, it bounced back up, ending the period at approximately 440, 000 cases. As for the females, they began the period at almost 470, 000 cases, followed by an upward fluctuation, overtaking the trend of males at 490, 000 victims in 1984, and it reached the highest figure at nearly 510, 000 individuals in 1999. By 200

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 and women who

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 of heart disease between 1979 and 2002.

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, the number of females who This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :passed away
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 of

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heart
 disease witnessed an upward trend during the period.

Focusing on the male victims of cardiovascular diseases, their figure

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men
, this trend fluctuated downward and hit the trough at slightly


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higher
 than 430, 000 individuals in 2001. After that, it bounced back up,

ending the period at approximately 440, 000 cases.

As for the females, they began the period at almost 470, 000 cases,

followed by an upward fluctuation, overtaking the trend of males at

490, 000 victims in 1984, and it reached the highest figure at nearly


510, 000 individuals in 1999. By 200