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The given graph details the growth rate of the global population over a 40-year period starting from 1970.

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The given graph details the growth rate of the global population over a 40-year period starting from 1970. Overall, the whole population has undergone a great improvement, and the Asia region contributed the most to this growth. Looking closely at the graph, it is clear that of all researched regions, Asia had the highest proportion, and it managed to retain its dominance throughout 40 years. In particular, in 1970, Asia had a total of around 280 million people, which accounted for more than half of the world population. This figure had then steadily risen to roughly 400 million people for 40 years while maintaining its proportion. Meanwhile, other continents, while registered upward trends, were outnumbered by Asia. For instance, there were initially almost 50 million people living in Europe in 1970, from which this data slowly climbed to slightly under 75 million in 2010. Similarly, both Africa and America received a small increase of 10 million and about 20 million respectively. Finally, although Oceania’s population also went up, its data was insignificant compared to the rest of the world.
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graph
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details
the growth rate of the global
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population
over a 40-year period starting from 1970.

Overall
, the whole
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population
has undergone a great improvement, and the Asia region contributed the most to this growth.

Looking
closely
at the graph, it is
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clear
that of all researched regions, Asia had the highest proportion, and it managed to retain its dominance throughout 40 years.
In particular
, in 1970, Asia had a total of around 280
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million
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people
, which accounted for more than half of the world
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population
. This figure had then
steadily
risen to roughly 400
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million
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people
for 40 years while maintaining its proportion.

Meanwhile, other continents, while registered upward trends,
were outnumbered
by Asia.
For instance
, there were
initially
almost 50
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million
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people
living in Europe in 1970, from which this data
slowly
climbed to
slightly
under 75
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million
in 2010.
Similarly
, both Africa and America received a
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small
increase of 10
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million
and about 20
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million
respectively
.
Finally
, although Oceania’s
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population
also
went up, its data was insignificant compared to the rest of the world.

IELTS academic The given graph details the growth rate of the global population over a 40-year period starting from 1970.

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