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The line graph compares the number of gym memberships between 2 genders in the period from 1980 to 2010.

The line graph compares the number of gym memberships between 2 genders in the period from 1980 to 2010. PLWnp

The line graph compares the number of gym memberships between 2 genders in the period from 1980 to 2010. Overall, despite fluctuations in both men and women, the number of female had a durable increase during whole period. The number of male members started just over 2000. After that it rised significantly over the next five years with nearly 4000 before falling down and remained stable over the period of five years after 1994. 2000 was considered as a remarkable point when it reached the peak of approximate 5000 members before plummeting dramatically at around 500 in the last year. Meanwhile female members began at just half of men. It doubled by 1984 and got the highest number at 3000 in 1995. Evidently, it finished the period with a figure of 2000 doubled men memberships.

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