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The line graph compares the number of 3 way of asking question in one cities Tourist information office during six month period in 2011.

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The line graph compares the number of 3 way of asking question in one cities Tourist information office during six month period in 2011. Overall, it is evident that despite initially having lowest number of people asking informaton in physical form, it became the populest among all at end of the time. Doing queries over telephone witnessed a upwad trend whereas enquiries by latter and email felt downward. To begin with initial propotion of queries in person which was just above 400 in January and it gradually increased to 800 by March after that it witnessed a rocket to approximately 1900 at the end of the period. Subsequently enqueries by phone rapidly changed from about 900 to 100 between January and March, before levelling off during March to April. However, it experienced a significant rise to 1600 by June. It could also be observed the ratio of reciving latter or email for enquiry slightly fall from nearly 600 to around 700 between January and March. After decreasing considerably from about 700 to above 300 among March and May, number of email and latter in Tourist Information Office remain unchanged till the period.
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informaton
in physical form, it became the
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populest
among all at
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of the time. Doing queries over telephone witnessed
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by latter and email felt downward.

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above 400 in January and it
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end
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from about 900 to 100 between January and March,
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before
levelling off during March to April.
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, it experienced a significant rise to 1600 by June.

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the ratio of
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reciving
latter or email for
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enquiry
slightly
fall from
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600 to around 700 between January and March. After decreasing
considerably
from about 700 to above 300 among March and May, number of email and latter in Tourist Information Office remain unchanged till the period.
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