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The line graph compares figures four main meats and poultry eating per capita between 1955 and 2012, also data for 2012 has been predicted by USDA.

The line graph compares figures four main meats and poultry eating per capita between 1955 and 2012, also data for 2012 has been predicted by USDA. JK7aw
The presented illustration shows the disparity between the amount of meat and poultry consumed per head, without bone, and by species in the US from 1955 to 2012, with the measurement in 2012 forecasted by the USDA forecasts. From an overall perspective, it has readily been transparent that the amount of beef and pork eaten dropped over time, yet the number of broilers and the amount of turkey used increased in the same period. Furthermore, turkey has always been the least consumed type of poultry in 57 years. First and foremost, starting as the most eaten sort of meat in 1955, beef experienced a significant climb of over 30 pounds from 1955 to 1977, which pinpoints 1977 as the peak of beef consumption with 90 pounds consumed within 1 year. Afterwards, the amount of beef bought gradually declined until reaching its predictably lowest point in 57 years with only 50 pounds sold in December 2012, according to USDA forecasts. Secondly, prior to 1976, the amount of bought pork seemed to undergo numerous fluctuations, however, it still showed an obvious decrease of 50 pounds in 1955 to only 40 pounds in 1976. After that, although the fluctuations still continued to take place, USDA forecasts assumed that the amount of pork sold would actually moderately increase to over 40 pounds. Unlike the 2 types of meat mentioned above, the number of broilers continuously climbed in the first 52 years from approximately 20 pounds in 1961 to its highest point in 2006 with 60 pounds broilers sold, yet from 2009, it clearly fell from its highest point to 55 pounds in 2010 and in December 2012, USDA forecasts believed that only around 56 pounds of broilers would be bought. Last but not least, the amount of turkey, unlike the aforementioned types, seemed to be the least fluctuate one, it steadily increased from less than 10 pounds in 1961 to 11 pounds in 2011. In December 2012, the amount of turkey sold was believed to remain unchanged, compared to the figure in 2011.
The presented illustration
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the disparity between the
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amount
of meat and poultry consumed per head, without bone, and by species in the US from 1955 to 2012, with the measurement in 2012 forecasted by the USDA forecasts.

From an
overall
perspective, it has
readily
been transparent that the
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amount
of
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beef
and pork eaten dropped over time,
yet
the number of broilers and the
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amount
of turkey
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used
increased in the same period.
Furthermore
, turkey has always been the least consumed type of poultry in 57 years.

First
and foremost, starting as the most eaten sort of meat in 1955,
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beef
experienced a significant climb of over
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30 pounds
from 1955 to 1977, which pinpoints 1977 as the peak of
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beef
consumption with
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90 pounds
consumed within 1 year. Afterwards, the
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amount
of
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beef
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bought
gradually
declined until reaching its
predictably
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lowest
point in 57 years with
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only
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50 pounds
sold in December 2012, according to USDA forecasts.
Secondly
, prior to 1976, the
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amount
of
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bought
pork seemed to undergo numerous fluctuations,
however
, it
still
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showed
an obvious decrease of
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50 pounds
in 1955 to
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only
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40 pounds
in 1976. After that, although the fluctuations
still
continued to take place, USDA forecasts assumed that the
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amount
of pork sold would actually
moderately
increase to over
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40 pounds
.

Unlike the 2 types of meat mentioned above, the number of broilers
continuously
climbed in the
first
52 years from approximately
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20 pounds
in 1961 to its highest point in 2006 with
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60 pounds
broilers sold,
yet
from 2009, it
clearly
fell from its highest point to
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55 pounds
in 2010 and in December 2012, USDA forecasts believed that
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only
around
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56 pounds
of broilers would be
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bought
. Last
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but
not least, the
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amount
of
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turkey
, unlike the aforementioned types, seemed to be the least fluctuate one, it
steadily
increased from less than
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10 pounds
in 1961 to
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11 pounds
in 2011. In December 2012, the
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amount
of
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turkey
sold
was believed
to remain unchanged, compared to the figure in 2011.
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IELTS academic The line graph compares figures four main meats and poultry eating per capita between 1955 and 2012, also data for 2012 has been predicted by USDA.

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