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The line graph compared amount of meat products consumed by each person in one European country over a quarter of century from 1979 to 2004.

The line graph compared amount of meat products consumed by each person in one European country over a quarter of century from 1979 to 2004. BayXd
In general, the consumption of fish remained relatively stable, while that of beef and lamb suffered a severe decline over the period. Chicken became most eaten type of meat at the end of the period. In 1979, beef was consumed more than any other type, with the numbers being well over 200 grams per person in a week. At the same time, about 150 grams of beef and lamb were used by one person. the figure fish constituted for just over 50 grams. The turnaround came in 1989 when the grams of eaten chicken overtook that of beef, which continued falling before ending up at just above 100. At the end of the period, the figure for chicken peaked at over a quarter of a kilo. While the need for lamb decreased to approximately 60 grams, the number of grams for fish did not change throughout shown period
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and lamb suffered a severe decline
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the period. Chicken became most eaten type of meat at the
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of the period.

In 1979,
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beef
was consumed
more than any other type, with the numbers being well
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over
200
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grams
per person in a week. At the same time, about 150
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grams
of
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beef
and lamb were
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used
by one person.
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the
figure fish constituted for
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over
50 grams.

The turnaround came in 1989 when the
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of eaten chicken overtook that of
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beef
, which continued falling
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before
ending up at
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above 100. At the
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end
of the period, the figure for chicken peaked at
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over
a quarter of a kilo. While the need for lamb decreased to approximately 60
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grams
, the number of
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grams
for fish did not
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throughout shown
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IELTS academic The line graph compared amount of meat products consumed by each person in one European country over a quarter of century from 1979 to 2004.

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