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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.

The Graph line illustrates The percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attraction in Edinburgh over thirty years from 1980 to 2010. With regards to the percentage of tourists who visited The Castle, There was a increase sharply between 1985 and 1995 and then it dropped down. While the percentage of visitor who visited The Zoo at first Fluctuated sharply from 1980 to 1990 but it reduced slightly. On the other hand, there was a fluctuation between 1980 and 2000 in the percentage of visitor who visited the Aquarium and then it rose sharply. About the tourists who visited The Festival it remained stable and just there was a slight decrease at 10 years firstly. Overall, The percentage of tourists who visited The castle and The Zoo attraction in over the period given had a reduce. while, there was slight increase in visitors who visited The festival and Aquarium.
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attraction in Edinburgh over thirty years from 1980 to 2010. With regards to the
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The Castle, There was a increase
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the Aquarium and then it rose
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The Festival it remained stable and
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The castle and The Zoo attraction in over the period
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The festival and Aquarium.
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh.

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