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The line graph below shows the main methods of commuting to work in New Stratford from 1970 to the present day with predictions to 2030.

The line graph below shows the main methods of commuting to work in New Stratford from 1970 to the present day with predictions to 2030. 7aewY

The line chart compares the popular transports of people in New Stratford using to workplace over the period 1970 and 2030. Overall, it can be seen clearly there was an upwards trend in both four sectors. While bus, train and motorbike are being forecasted to continue by 2030, the opposite is true for the other. Starting 1970, more than 8, 2 million people were using bus for work purposes. After two decades, this figure dropped sharply by approximately 2 million but they rose vastly again and being projected to 2030 as well. The trend for motorbike was similar to bus, but progressively low. Regarding private car, there was a significant increase, peaked at 12 million in 2010, compared to the years before – the highest point of any transportations, in any year before. However, it is foreseen that the users are gradually less favored by 2010. Remarkably, the commuter train started with the lowest share of methods at just 2 million in 1970, but then this rocket by 8 million over the past 40 years. From them on, they are going on surpassing all the others to reach a higher as predictions for future years In conclusion, although four methods have seen the increase trend across the period, worked people in New Stratford are being more and more attractive by the public transport systems as the main development factor.

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