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Population figures in Japan

Population figures in Japan 15RBN
Anonymous The given bar chart shows the trend of the Japanese population in past, present, and future while the table gives information regarding the population of people aged 65 years or over with their percentage in the total population over the given period. Overall, the population of Japan increased significantly in the past years. However, a decline is expected in the future whereas the number of elderly people has increased and is predicted to increase in the future. Now turning to the details, Japan's population has gradually increased between the years 1950 and 2005. In the year 1950, there were around 84 million people in Japan which reached more than 127 million in 2010. The highest population growth was noticed within the 5 years period from 1970 to 1975, more than 8 million people were added in Japan. The trend shows that the population in Japan started decreasing from the year 2010 and is to be predicted to decline more in the future also. The big drop would be between 2035 and 2055. In these 20 years, approximately 20 million people will be decreased in the country. As illustrated in the table, the percentage of elderly people (aged 65 years or more) has increased over the period and is expected to keep on increasing in the future also. In 1950, the number of people aged 65 years or more was 4. 1 million which was 4. 9 percent of the total population, this figure dramatically increased in the next fifteen years to 25. 7 million which consisted of 20 percent of the total number of people in the country. In the future, it will reach 37. 2 million in the year 2035 and 36. 5 million in 2055 which will be more than 30 percent of the total population.
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, Japan's
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1950, there were around 84
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in 2010. The highest
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IELTS academic Population figures in Japan

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