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The line graph and pie chart demonstrate data about plant and animal in tropical forest, which under of dangerous of disappearing

The line graph and pie chart demonstrate data about plant and animal in tropical forest, which under of dangerous of disappearing. Line graph provide information between 2000 to 2100, and units are measured in million species per decade. Overall, the trend steadily rose by 2060, and reach peak at 50000 units, while in 2000 was under 5000 units. After 2060, trend rapidly declined. Subsequently stay at 29000 units in 2100. According to the pie chart, the huge influence on plants life is human impact (81. 3%), on the other hand is natural event (18. 7%). If agriculture is 18. 7% of all human impact, then harvesting is 14. 4%. Development and logging are 21. 1% (10. 4% and 9. 7% respectively). Livestock has 7. 7% of anthropogenic factors, which affect to plant life. With regards to remaining factors, there was approximately 20%. Natural events divided into only 2 groups: natural disaster is 7% and other natural events is 11. 7%
The line graph and pie chart demonstrate data about plant and animal in tropical forest, which under of
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dangerous
of disappearing. Line graph provide information
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between 2000 to 2100
, and
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units
are measured
in
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million
species per decade.

Overall
, the trend
steadily
rose by 2060, and reach peak at 50000
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units
, while in 2000 was under 5000
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units
. After 2060, trend
rapidly
declined.
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Subsequently
stay at 29000
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units
in 2100.

According to the pie chart, the huge influence on plants life is human impact (81. 3%),
on the other hand
is
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natural
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event
(18. 7%). If agriculture is 18. 7% of all human impact, then harvesting is 14. 4%. Development and logging are 21. 1% (10. 4% and 9. 7%
respectively
). Livestock has 7. 7% of anthropogenic factors, which affect to plant life.
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With regards to
remaining factors, there was approximately 20%.
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Natural
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events
divided into
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2 groups:
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natural
disaster is 7% and other
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natural
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events
is 11. 7%
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IELTS academic The line graph and pie chart demonstrate data about plant and animal in tropical forest, which under of dangerous of disappearing

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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