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The line chart showed number of people (millions) travel to UK and number of people (millions) from the UK from year 1979 to year 1999

The line chart showed number of people (millions) travel to UK and number of people (millions) from the UK from year 1979 to year 1999 0g8q
The line chart showed number of people (millions) travel to UK and number of people (millions) from the UK from year 1979 to year 1999. On the other hand, the bar chart illustrated top choices countries travel by UK people in year 1999. Overall, the line chart provided number of UK people increased dramatically visits abroad throughout 20 years whereas the line chart indicated France is the most famous country visited by UK people in year 1999 among few countries. The line chart provided there was slightly increased number of traveler abroad by UK residents from (12 millions people) year 1979 to (20 millions people) year 1985 and the number of visitor aboard by UK residents increased drastically from year 1986 to year 1999. On the other hand, the number of overseas visitor travel to UK rose steadily from (10 millions people) year 1979 to (11 millions people) year 1985 and went up from 11 millions people to 28 millions people from year 1986 to year 1999. The bar chart indicated France was the most famous country visited by UK residents and more traveler (11 millions people) in year 1999 compared to 4 other countries whereas Spain was the second popular country visited by UK residents (9 million people). Turkey was the least popular country visited by UK residents and less traveler (2 millions people) compared to USA (4 millions people ) and Greece (3 millions people) in year 1999.
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(millions)
travel to UK and
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of
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people
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(millions)
from

the UK from
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year
1979 to
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year
1999.
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, the bar
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chart
illustrated top choices countries

travel by UK
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people
in
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year
1999.
Overall
, the
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provided
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number
of UK
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people
increased

dramatically
visits abroad throughout 20 years whereas the
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chart
indicated France is the most

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famous
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country
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visited
by UK
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people
in
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year
1999 among few countries.

The
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provided there was
slightly
increased
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number
of traveler abroad by UK residents from
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(12 millions
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people)
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year
1979 to (20
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people)
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1985 and the
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of visitor aboard by UK

residents increased
drastically
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1986 to
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1999.
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, the
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number
of overseas

visitor travel to UK rose
steadily
from (10
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millions
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people)
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year
1979 to (11
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millions
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1985

and went up from 11
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millions
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people
to 28
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from
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year
1986 to
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1999.

The bar
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indicated France was the most
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famous
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country
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visited
by UK residents and more traveler

(11
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millions
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people)
in
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1999 compared to 4 other
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whereas Spain was the second popular

country
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by UK residents (9
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people)
. Turkey was the least popular
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visited
by UK

residents and less traveler (2
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compared
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to USA
(4
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and Greece
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(3 millions
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in
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year
1999.
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IELTS academic The line chart showed number of people (millions) travel to UK and number of people (millions) from the UK from year 1979 to year 1999

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