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The line chart show the production and demand of steel industry in 2010.

The line chart show the production and demand of steel industry in 2010. raY0L
The linear representation delineates the information regarding the construction and desires for stell and frequency of employees in steel company in 2010. The data is calibrated in million tonnes. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that there were maximum production of steel in August while, the actual demand of steel were less in beginning of December. To embark with, the proportion of steel manufacturing were begun to rose in January from 4000 million tonnes and eventually reached at peakest level with approximately 5000 million tonnes. In addition, the production of steel were fell down again at just 4000 tonnes. The construction of steel remain stable till August and gradually declined at near about 3000 million tonnes. Besides, there were significantly growth in production of steel in September. It rapidly declined in December at just 8000 million tonnes. Further reinforcing, the demand for steel were initially begun to plunged in January with 2000 million tonnes. By contast, there were fluctuation trend during the period. The demand was highly increased in December with 2000 million tonnes.
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stell
and frequency of employees in
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steel
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company
in 2010. The data
is calibrated
in
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million
tonnes. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that there were maximum production of
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steel
in August while, the actual demand of
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steel
were less in beginning of December. To embark with, the proportion of
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steel
manufacturing
were begun
to rose in January from 4000
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million
tonnes and
eventually
reached at
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peakest
level with approximately 5000
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million
tonnes.
In addition
, the production of
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steel
were fell down again at
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just
4000 tonnes. The construction of
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steel
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remain
stable till August and
gradually
declined at near about 3000
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million
tonnes.
Besides
, there were
significantly
growth in production of
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steel
in September. It
rapidly
declined in December at
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just
8000
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million
tonnes.
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Further
reinforcing, the demand for
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steel
were
initially
begun to plunged in January with 2000
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million
tonnes. By
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contast
, there were fluctuation trend during the period. The demand was
highly
increased in December with 2000
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tonnes.
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