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The line chart show the overseas residents visits to the UK- by purpose, 2000 to 2016.

The line chart show the overseas residents visits to the UK- by purpose, 2000 to 2016. QL5rK
The line chart depicts the information about the people who visit UK for four different purpose from 2000 and 16 years later. It is crystal clear from the chart, 6, 000 passengers were come in UK for meeting thier friends and relatives in 2000 but after 8years its increased by 4 thousands. Between 2000 to 2016, holiday reason gradually climbed up from 7 thousands to just over 14 thousands by 2016. The business and relatives were fluctuated widely, but the trend was went up. The trend for business reason was upward, from 6, 500 in 2000 to 9, 000 in 2006 but in next 2 years it was goes down and again its reach on 12, 000 in 2006. The figure of miscellaneous was same from 2000 to next 16 years(3 thousands). Overall, according to the international passenger survey, people who visit for holiday, business and meet to friends and relatives were upsurge but miscellaneous was stand on same position.
The line chart depicts the information about the
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people
who visit UK for four
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different
purpose
Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 2000 to 16"?
from 2000 and 16
years later.

It is crystal
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clear
from the chart, 6, 000 passengers were
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come
in UK for meeting
Possible spelling mistake found.
thier
friends and relatives in 2000
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but
after 8years its increased by 4 thousands.
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "Between 2000 and 2016".
Between 2000 to 2016
, holiday reason
gradually
climbed up from 7 thousands to
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just
over 14 thousands by 2016. The business and relatives
were fluctuated
widely
,
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but
the trend was
Consider using a past participle here: "gone".
went
up.

The trend for business reason was upward, from 6, 500 in 2000 to 9, 000 in 2006
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but
in
next
2 years it was goes down and again its reach on 12, 000 in 2006.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
figure of miscellaneous was same from 2000 to
next
16 years(3 thousands).

Overall
, according to the international passenger survey,
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people
who visit for holiday, business and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
to friends and relatives were
Consider using a past participle here: "upsurged".
upsurge
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
miscellaneous was stand on same position.
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IELTS academic The line chart show the overseas residents visits to the UK- by purpose, 2000 to 2016.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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