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The line chart illustrates variations in the proportion of female

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The line chart illustrates variations in the proportion of female employees aged 15-64 from 2003 to 2009 in five countries. Overall, that while the employment level of women in this age group in Iceland decreased, the percentages of females aged 15 to 64 being employed in the other nations increased. Furthermore, during the research period, the figure for Iceland was the highest. In 2003, the three countries with the highest employment rates for women aged 15-64 were Iceland, Canada, and Germany, respectively, with figures of 80%, 70%, and 60% respectively. The remaining two countries have much lower figures with 25% and 35%. After 6 years, the proportion of working-age women in Iceland decreased slightly while the figures for Canada, Germany, and Chile increased slightly, while the figures for Turkey recovered in 2009 after a period of decline.
The line chart illustrates variations in the proportion of female employees aged 15-64 from 2003 to 2009 in five countries.

Overall
, that while the employment level of women in this age group in Iceland decreased, the percentages of females aged 15 to 64
being employed
in the other nations increased.
Furthermore
, during the research period, the
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figure
for Iceland was the highest.

In 2003, the three countries with the highest employment rates for women aged 15-64 were Iceland, Canada, and Germany,
respectively
, with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figures
of 80%, 70%, and 60%
respectively
. The remaining two countries have much lower
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figures
with 25% and 35%.

After 6 years, the proportion of working-age women in Iceland decreased
slightly
while the
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figures
for Canada, Germany, and Chile increased
slightly
, while the
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figures
for Turkey recovered in 2009 after a period of decline.
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