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The line chart illustrates the number of inquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city through three means of communication between January and June of the year 2011.

The line chart illustrates the number of inquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city through three means of communication between January and June of the year 2011. eVBJ
The line chart illustrates the number of inquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city through three means of communication between January and June of the year 2011. It is clear that visitors to the city made more inquires in person and via telephone, while letters or emails became less common choice. Also, the number of enquiries in person experienced the most dramatic change among the given methods. In the first month of 2011, the Tourist Information Office received 900 enquires from telephone, while just under 800 ones were sent by letter or email. Not many tourists chose asking for information in person, with just above 400 queries. Over the next three months, telephone still remained the most popular method with 1000 enquires. Meanwhile, the number of enquires made in person saw a considerable growth to 800 of emails, surpassing the figure for email and postal enquires. From March to June, the office received significantly more enquires in person. Just after four months, the number of enquires by this way soared by more than 1, 000 to peak at 1, 900 in June. The period also recorded a significant rise to 1, 600 in the figure for telephone. By contrast, fewer people sent emails or letter to make enquires and the number ended at the lowest point of only under 400.
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to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city through three means of communication between January and June of the year 2011.

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above 400 queries. Over the
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.

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by this way soared by more than 1, 000 to peak at 1, 900 in June. The period
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IELTS academic The line chart illustrates the number of inquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city through three means of communication between January and June of the year 2011.

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