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The line chart illustrates the figures for the trends in the birth and death in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101

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The line chart illustrates the figures for the trends in the birth and death in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101 Overall, the rates of death and birth of New Zealand’s population rose substantially till now and the death proportion (chỗ này có vấn đề vì proportion chỉ dùng với bài ghi rõ % nhe) is predicted to go up dramatically while the birth percentage (cùng là nghĩa tỉ lệ, nhưng ko phải gì cũng dùng được) has a gradual decline in the future. sao future mà has? The last 100 years, an upward trend of the death rate remained relatively stable and the number of the deceased reached its highest point of 15, 000 people in 1921. In terms of the changes in the birth ratios, New Zealand noticed the significant variation in the figure for people born. From 1901 to 1941, there was a fluctuation of the birth rate which hit the lowest point of roughly 25, 000 people over the following 20 years. Since then, the birth rate started increasing rapidly over the next few decades and reached the peak value 65, 000 between 1961 and 1981. Looking at participation numbers, by the 2021, it is expected that there would be around 52, 000 births. It then experienced a relatively huge fluctuation until 2041. Finally, the birth rate is predicted to show a steady downward trend from 2061 to 2101. As for the death proportion, the number of its forecast go on climbing up and surpass the number of births in 2041. It ís likely reach to approximately 60, 000 people in 2061 and may decline slightly over the next four decades.
The line chart illustrates the figures for the trends in the
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and death in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101

Overall
, the
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rates
of death and
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birth
of New Zealand’s population rose
substantially
till
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now
and the death proportion (
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)
is predicted
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percentage (
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) has a gradual decline in the future.
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mà
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The last 100 years, an upward trend of the death
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rate
remained
relatively
stable and the
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number
of the deceased reached its highest point of 15, 000
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people
in 1921. In terms of the
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changes
in the
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birth
ratios, New Zealand noticed the significant variation in the figure for
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people
born. From 1901 to 1941, there was a fluctuation of the
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birth
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rate
which hit the lowest point of roughly 25, 000
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people
over the following 20 years. Since then, the
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birth
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rate
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started
increasing
rapidly
over the
next
few decades and reached the peak value 65, 000 between 1961 and 1981.

Looking at participation
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, by the 2021, it is
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expected
that there would be around 52, 000
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births
. It then experienced a
relatively
huge fluctuation until 2041.
Finally
, the
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birth
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rate
is predicted
to
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show
a steady downward trend from 2061 to 2101. As for the death proportion, the
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number
of its forecast go on climbing up and surpass the
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number
of
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births
in 2041. It
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likely reach to approximately 60, 000
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people
in 2061 and may decline
slightly
over the
next
four decades.
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IELTS academic The line chart illustrates the figures for the trends in the birth and death in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101

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