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The line chart illustrate the proportion of Australian residents who were born outside of Australia such as Asia, the Uk, and other regions from 1997 to 2011.

The line chart illustrate the proportion of Australian residents who were born outside of Australia such as Asia, the Uk, and other regions from 1997 to 2011. J0ooE
The line chart illustrates the proportion of Australian residents being born outside of Australia such as Asia, the UK, and other regions from 1997 to 2011. Overall, there was an opposite trend in the ratio of people living in Australia between Asia and the UK citizens. In particular, Asian people accounted for 2. 5% of people living in Australia in 1976 while there were nearly same the number of the UK and other regions people live in Australia (around 12% and 14%, respectively). There was a significant increase to 15% of Asian people in Australia in 2011. Meanwhile, the number of British citizens in Australia dropped dramatically to 5% in 2011. In terms of other countries, there was a fluctuation trend which reduced slightly 7. 5% in 1986; then raised sharply to nearly 15% before going down tiny 12. 5% in 2011. For total figure, they made up around 22. 5% of people from foreign countries living in Australia. They tended to decrease very small to 20% in 2001 before moving upward again to 25% in 2011.
The line chart illustrates the proportion of Australian residents
being born
outside of Australia such as Asia, the UK, and other regions from 1997 to 2011.

Overall
, there was an opposite trend in the ratio of
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people
living in Australia between Asia and the UK citizens.

In particular
, Asian
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people
accounted for 2. 5% of
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people
living in Australia in 1976 while there were
nearly
same the number of the UK and other regions
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people
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live
in Australia (around 12% and 14%,
respectively
). There was a significant increase to 15% of Asian
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people
in Australia in 2011. Meanwhile, the number of British citizens in Australia dropped
dramatically
to 5% in 2011. In terms of other countries, there was a fluctuation trend which
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reduced
slightly
7. 5% in 1986; then raised
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15%
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going down tiny 12. 5% in 2011.

For total figure, they made up around 22. 5% of
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people
from foreign countries living in Australia. They tended to decrease
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to 20% in 2001
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moving upward again to 25% in 2011.
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IELTS academic The line chart illustrate the proportion of Australian residents who were born outside of Australia such as Asia, the Uk, and other regions from 1997 to 2011.

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