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The bar chart shows the value of different sorts of exports in 2015 and 2016. And the table shows the percentage change in each kind of exports.

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The bar chart shows the value of different sorts of exports in 2015 and 2016. And the table shows the percentage change in each kind of exports. According to the first chart, petroleum products were the most valuable exports in both 2015 and 2016, reaching more than 60 billion dollars each year. And the exports that gained second value are the engineered goods, which gained about 55 billion dollars in 2015 and 60 in 2016. The exports with lowest value are textiles and the value of it never overtook 30 billion dollars in these two years. As can be seen from the second table, the value of almost all the products exported increased between 2015 and 2016, but except for the kind of gems and jewellery, which decreased by 5. 18 percent. The value of textiles had the fastest increase, 15. 24 percent, then followed by engineered goods, 8. 5 percent. In conclusion, the value of exports in this country had an increase between 2015 and 2016.
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are the engineered
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of it never overtook 30 billion dollars in these two years.

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of almost all the products exported increased between 2015 and 2016,
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of textiles had the fastest increase, 15. 24 percent, then followed by engineered
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, 8. 5 percent.

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in this country had an increase between 2015 and 2016.
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