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The line chart depicts the ratio of all the old age people about 65 years in three countries Japan, Sweden and USA during the period of 100 years. The data is calibrated in percentage.

The line chart depicts the ratio of all the old age people about 65 years in three countries Japan, Sweden and USA during the period of 100 years. The data is calibrated in percentage. bbNwB
The line chart depicts the ratio of all the old age people about 65 years in three countries Japan, Sweden and USA during the period of 100 years. The data is calibrated in percentage. Overall, its quite evident that, out of three nations, the proportion is in a rising trend towards the end. Whereas, Japan shows a sudden increase and overlap other two centuries. In addition Sweden and USA shows a similiar pattern trend over the given years. It is clear from the graph that, the percentage of old age people in Japan were below 5% in first 60 years 1940 to 2000. Then it shows a gradual increase for the period 2020 10% more. While, looking the trend of USA and Sweden, both have similar trend gradual increase up to the year 1980. From the period 1980 o 2020, USA keeps a linear position and Sweden shows a sudden increase. The noteworthy point, the Japan showed a decline trend in beginning and at the end of the time it shows a sudden hike over the others.
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IELTS academic The line chart depicts the ratio of all the old age people about 65 years in three countries Japan, Sweden and USA during the period of 100 years. The data is calibrated in percentage.

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