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The line graph depicts/shows/indicates/illustrates/gives us an information about a comparison in the fluctuation of average temperatures from January to December, as measured in degrees Celsius, from -10 to +30 with an interval of 10 degrees, among four cities, for Tokyo, London, New York (NY) and Berlin.

The line graph depicts/shows/indicates/illustrates/gives us an information about a comparison in the fluctuation of average temperatures from January to December, as measured in degrees Celsius, from -10 to +30 with an interval of 10 degrees, among four cities, for Tokyo, London, New York (NY) and Berlin. KW8xN
The line graph depicts/shows/indicates/illustrates/gives us an information about a comparison in the fluctuation of average temperatures from January to December, as measured in degrees Celsius, from -10 to +30 with an interval of 10 degrees, among four cities, for Tokyo, London, New York (NY) and Berlin. Overall, in regards to changes in temperatures with an increase in temperature for the first half of the all period and then a decrease in the second one, it can be vividly seen from the chart that all four of these cities have a parabolic pattern. Analyis Firstly, in January, these four cities temperatures range from zero to 8 degrees, with London and Berlin close to freezing point. On average, Tokyo, has the highest temperatures throughout the year among these four cities with 8 degrees in January and reaching/climbing to its highest point of 27 degrees in August then dropping to 10 degrees by the end of the year. Secondly, NY has the greatest change in average temperatures in the year, beginning with 0 degrees in January and getting as hot as Tokyo in July, at 25 degrees, before dropping back down to just 4 degrees in December. Finally, both Berlin and London witness relatively similar temperatures in throughout the year with only a few degrees of variance in any given month. From April to Sept. Berlin is slightly warmer than London, conversely, it is slightly cooler in the other months.
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from January to December, as measured in
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Celsius, from -10 to +30 with an interval of 10
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, among four
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range from zero to 8
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in January and reaching/climbing to its highest point of 27
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IELTS academic The line graph depicts/shows/indicates/illustrates/gives us an information about a comparison in the fluctuation of average temperatures from January to December, as measured in degrees Celsius, from -10 to +30 with an interval of 10 degrees, among four cities, for Tokyo, London, New York (NY) and Berlin.

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