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The line chart compares the trend in growth of number of male and female pass outs in Canadian universities between 1992 and 2007.

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The line chart compares the trend in growth of number of male and female pass outs in Canadian universities between 1992 and 2007. It is clearly shown that the females are always ahead in terms of successful graduations. Although both the male and female number of graduates increased drastically in this span, it is very interesting to point that the male pass out figure has not reached at least the trough figure of female number in the entire 15 year period. At the begining, the number of females graduated are close to 1Lakh whereas in male statistics only 70, 000 were graduated. Over the years both the patterns oscillated slightly for a decade, but looked stable. In this span, both male and female total has followed a synchronized pattern. It was in the term 2001, the graduates passing out has started gaining pace. The number of female pass outs has further overtaken the males by the year 2006. By the end of 2007, the female pass out stat reached around 0. 15 millions and males around 0. 1 million.
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of male and
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pass outs in Canadian universities between 1992 and 2007.

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shown that the
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females
are always ahead in terms of successful graduations. Although both the male and
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female
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number
of graduates increased
drastically
in this span, it is
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interesting to point that the male pass
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figure has not reached at least the trough figure of
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female
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number
in the entire
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15 year
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begining
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graduated are close to 1Lakh whereas in male statistics
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70, 000
were graduated
. Over the years both the patterns oscillated
slightly
for a decade,
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but
looked stable. In this span, both male and
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female
total has followed a synchronized pattern.

It was in the term 2001, the graduates passing
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out
has
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started
gaining pace. The
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number
of
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female
pass outs has
further
overtaken the
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by the year 2006. By the
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end
of 2007, the
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female
pass
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stat reached around 0. 15 millions and
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around 0. 1 million.
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